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Words from Our Young Authors at Beach Elementary

This session at Beach we are exploring the elements of a good mystery. Our students have been crafting mystery stories and learning all about creative writing techniques, from character and plot development to using concrete details and the five senses to tell a story. We’ve been having a great time! Here are some teasers...

From: Describe a setting with the five senses.

In the woods

The woods smelled of bark. The sun shone through the trees. Birds chirped and flew from tree to tree. Squirrels ran among the leaves on the ground and ran from branch to branch. A small creek twisted between trees. Freshly fallen leaves flowed down the stream. A woodpecker pecked at a tree. Slick wet rocks poked above the water.

-Phoebe

From: A free write with the prompt “This is one story I’ve never told anyone.” 

Bang! Thunder crashed outside the house. The house shook as if made of paper. The foundation rattled and creaked. It didn’t sound like the old place could sustain anymore wear. Drip. Drip. Drip, drop, drip. Drip, drop, drip, drop. There was a leak directly above my bed. I rolled over and tried to sleep but I couldn’t.

-Calla

 

From: A free write with the prompt “I thought it was just a glitch in my computer...” 

I thought it was just a glitch in my computer. But that was yesterday, before I discovered that I was in a newspaper that said I was the most wanted man in the world. I went downstairs to talk to my parents, when they shrieked and called 9-1-1. I said, ‘I’m your son, not a fugitive.” They ran out of the house. What had I done?

-Rohan

 

From: How to organize a mystery around "Who? What? Where? When? Why? How?" using the prompt “It was missing.” 

Leah Weavin Mysteries Book 2 The Clue in the Note-Clock-Private-Book 

The mysterious object started floating in the air. Nobody knew what it was except me. I knew it was a note-clock-private-book. That is a notebook with a built-in automatic clock and a fold out thingy so you can write privately. People from all around town were gathering to see it. I’m Leah. Leah Weavin. I called my two best friends, Jane and Derik. I told them where I was and that they needed to get over here.

-Maria

 

From: Change or add a twist ending to a common fairytale. 

Little Blue Riding Hood

One sunny morning Little Blue Riding went skipping through the forest all the way to her grampa’s house. On the way there she met a sly mean looking fox that acted suspiciously nice to her. Little Bue Riding Hood ran away from the fox as fast as her dainty legs could carry her. Once she arrived she quickly tossed the wine bottle to her grampa and was halfway out the door when she noticed something very weird about her grandpa. She rushed back inside.

-Helena

 

From: Describe a setting using the five senses. 

In a damp bright place that smells like rain and dew, that has birds that chirp so soft. Your mouth is dry and sticky. You see trees and vines and really pretty flowers. You touch the flowers. They feel really soft and silky, practically perfect.

 -Olivia

From: A suspenseful mystery

There he was the evil scientist, James P. Beciss. When I went in, I saw my six friends in clear glass tubes in animal form.

"Oh my," I said.

"I knew you would come!" said James and he put his hand out and pulled me in to his black scarred hands." (To be continued...)

-Mingxin

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What have "Take My Word For It!" kids been up to? Check out Beach Elementary:

Students in our after-school and community classes are exploring all the different ways writers generate ideas, and put captivating words on the page.

Here are writing excerpts and some photos of our young authors working with instructor, Emily Phillips at Beach Elementary in Piedmont:

 

By Mikey:

Beach_Mikey Limerick

There once was a man named Rezon.

His will was to free a bad con.

He set out by car

And traveled very far

But got distracted and watched Tron.

 

By Azul:

Beach_Azul Limerick

There once was a girl named Lu

Who swam in the ocean blue.

A shark came up

So she beat him up

And threw him to Timbuktu

 

By David:

Beach_David Limerick

 There once was an old man named Rob,

who had a friend named Screaming Bob.

They went to a park

and had so much fun.

When they left, they began to sob.

 

By Gabby:

The Opposite World

Long ago people did things differently. They would start off the day with a bowl of TV while watching cereal. Then they would get groceries so they could buy money. They would go to the park to swing on the slide and slide down the swing. Then they would play fetch with the cat and give dog-nip to the dog. Then they would go to the bathroom in the bed and go to sleep in the toilet.

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By Griffen:

I don’t know what happens underground, but I suspect that they have a tri-species party (unicorn, leprechaun, troll) and they do the hustle till they pass out drunk, but if there is an earthquake everyone retreats to the bunkers and they resume the party on twitter.

Beach_Griffin

By Jack:

Brussels Sprouts

The first time I tried it I ate it really, really fast. So fast I thought it didn’t have a taste, but then came the kickback. The second time I tried it, it was a kind of paste like thing on a cracker. When I heard it was Brussels sprouts, I immediately started rubbing my tongue on my sweatshirt.

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By TH:

Beach_TH There once was a dragon named Joe.

He had always been filled with woe.

He went to Zion

And ate a lion,

Said, “Tasty, I’ll have a HO-HO!”

 

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