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Odes to Food & More from our Young Writers at Sunset Elementary

SUNSET Fall 2014 TMWFIThis fall the 3rd-5th grade students at Sunset Elementary focused their creativity on food writing. Using all of their senses to write similes and metaphors, to personify food, making them characters in exploring their worlds and going on adventures; they've written odes to the food they like best, and even recipes of themselves.  

From "Odes to Food"

Ode to Melons

In Summertime melons roam the streets of the city. Honey Dew Melon is as sweet as candy. Hiding in people's bags until they get home. Until he or she takes out a knife and slices the melon by its wrinkly skin. Juice gushes out, and the melon is cut into two perfect halves. by JENNIFER

Ode to Pound Cake

Oh Pound Cake. You are Mt. Everest just waiting for me to take a huge lion bite out of you. Whenever I see you I have no idea of where to start munching. Every part of you is delicious and sweet. Even if you gave me a huge, legendary stomach ache I would still gobble you up like a tiger eating a deer. by JASPER

Ode to French Fries

I walked over to delicious heaven. The item was aware of what was about to happen. It ran when it was being seasoned with salt. It ran when into obstacles all over. Finally it stopped moving. A giant picked it up. CHOP CHOP by MATT

Ode to Watermelon

Everything is miserable without watermelon. Its juicy red flesh tastes like heaven. When you take a bite, and the juicy runs down your hands like a flood, you are filled with happiness. Its green skin is like a maze, when you finally finish, you get your prize. by ISABEL From: Descriptive writing about a food you hate.

Mushrooms

At first, I didn't like mushrooms, even though I had never tried one. Then, one day, I went to my Bubba and Zieda's house. They made something that consisted of pasta (which I like) and mushrooms. I tried one of the mushrooms, unsure of what would happen next. I popped it into my mouth, and did a cross between spitting it out and chocking on it. I knew I wouldn't like them. by SYLVIA

Food Experience!

My whole family was urging me on. The green, wet broccoli was just sitting there on my plate. When I picked it up, it felt odd and cold. I closed my eyes and took a bite. It was GREAT! by DIADORA    

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Madera Elementary's Recipe Writers

Madera Elementary’s 3rd-5th graders have been writing about “Secrets” this fall. They created secret identities, codes, mysteries…who knows if they will share the rest! ;)  

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Click on each photo to read some of their creations from a day working on secret recipes & free writing (in their own script):

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"In Flight" at Joaquin Miller Elementary

In this session, the 3rd-5th grade writers at Joaquin Miller Elementary explored the theme of flight. They composed letters from Amelia Earhart to the girls of the world, used sensory details to describe the flight of the bumblebee, and wrote a first person account of Icarus’ fateful flight. Students experimented with a variety of craft elements such as point of view, sensory details, simile, personification and metaphor. The result was a collection of imaginative, colorful, odd and humorous fiction and poetry that illuminated humankind’s age-old obsession with flying. Prompt: Write about Icarus’ fateful flight from the first-person point of view.

 

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Flight of Icarus

My name is Icarus. I have been locked inside a stupid tower almost my whole life. One boring day I was putting out birdseed when my dad said that something was done. I was like, “Whatever,” but he said, “Let us fly!” He put a pair of wings on and jumped out the window and I followed. I flew high, the wind in my face. After a while, the feathers started falling off. I thought, Oh no! I went too close to the sun! I fell into the water. It felt cold on my flesh.

-Dylan

Prompt: Invisibility vs. Flight – Write a story in which you have one of these powers.

Dr. Ginko’s Amazing Am-777

Hi. I’m Dr. S.R. Ginkos. Some people call me Dr. Sr. Ginkos, and some people call me Dr. Sr. I’m a scientist who works for the military and I have figured out a way to make people invisible using an acid called Antrixamacility or Am-777. About ten other scientists know about it. We only have about five quantities and we plan to use it on the five most aggressive soldiers at a base in South Florida.

-E.J.

 

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I Am There

I am there. Following. Watching. Waiting. Why, I wonder, do I do this? I am a shadow. I must mirror your every move. Sliding in and out of existence as if can’t die. But I can. I’ve been killed over and over by deadly assassins but regenerated every time. I wake with no feet, live without a heart. Skimming the ground, I fly soundlessly over light. Dying slowly every day, vengeance has become a part of me.

-Marley

 

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Nox and Nob

There once was a man who discovered a gem the size of a bowling ball. He named it Nox and went home with it. When he got home, he was about to turn on the lights when he noticed that Nox was giving off a whitish blue glow. Nob went to brush his teeth but nearly fell into the bathtub. He looked in the mirror. In the reflection was nothing but the bathroom wall.

-Miko

 

Prompt: Use sensory details to describe what it feels like to fly.

 

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When Pigs Fly

When I, Mr. Piggy, fly, I don’t fly straight. I have special wings that glide through frost and coldness, high in the air. The feeling is completely different from being on the ground. It’s better. High above the humans, I feel safe.

-Marco  

Prompt: Use Significant Detail to render the place you are from using the phrase "I am from..."

 

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I Am From

I am from clean up your room from cinnamon roll donuts and maple oatmeal with brown sugar. I am from Mexico on Spring Break from from swimming with my friend and reading Greek mythology. I am from snorkeling in Belize from from Mine Craft and reading for too long.

-Josh

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Self Portraits from Crocker Highlands

Our mission at "Take My Word For It!" is to help kids write, but perhaps more importantly, to encourage kids to find their own voices and accept themselves just as they are. In keeping with that goal, these TMWFI kids were asked to draw and describe themselves in a self portrait. Title: Outer Space Self Portrait Excerpt: "I am unique because I have brown eyes and black slicked hair...I want to be seen as somebody brave, strong, and talented, who never gives up." -Matt

 

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Title: Self Portrait Excerpt: "I want more time for self portraits and the world." -Lyla

 

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Title: Self Portrait Excerpt: "What makes me distinct is my freckles and my kindness because I love to help out. When I grow up I want to be an animator, an artist, a writer, or president." -Emilia

 

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Title: Me Excerpt: "Me: my smile is the widest smile. My hair is to my shoulders, my freckles...I want to be an artist and author." -Hedy

 

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Title: Madelyn

Excerpt: "I am changing. Year and year, day and day, becoming smarter and more athletic."-Madelyn

   

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Title: Don, don, don

Excerpt: "I change all the time... I change by my style and personality." -Julia

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Title: Score 100,000

Excerpt: "I want people to see me as funny, smart, good at games, and a good writer."

-Justice

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Title: Oliver

Excerpt: "What makes me distinct is that my eyes change color. I want people to see me as smart, adventurous, and brave."-Oliver

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Title: My Animal Friends

Excerpt: "I am me because no one else in the world talks like me, sounds like me, no one else acts like me, and loves animals just as much as I love animals. -Kaitlyn

   

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Title: Self Portrait Outer Space

Excerpt: "I imagine myself in college as tall and athletic. And I want to study to be a scientist/inventor." -Sean

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Title: I Love New York

Excerpt: "I would like to become an artist and musician...I think my culture and my singing voice make me distinct." -Mila

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Title: Self Portrait

Excerpt: "I want to help protect the animals. I love  animals." -Iona

     

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Title: Dinosaur Land and Epic Land

Excerpt: "What makes me me is I like the world (and I like to eat candy and pizza)." -Kyra

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Secrets! from our young writers at Weibel Elementary

This spring at Weibel Elementary School in Fremont, our students have been writing about a variety of secrets--from secret codes to secret recipes--while simultaneously learning how to craft better fiction using classic story elements such as plot, setting, character. The writing has been spectacular, quirky, and creative. Here are some snippets:  

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From: Secret Recipes (Students create their own secret recipe - for anything!)

How to Make Fizz Soup

Ingredients (which you probably don't have) 2 rocks from Mars 6 white sea urchins 7 c flour 1/2 c green tea 1/6 c melted Pluto ice rocks 1 c tomato sauce (or any sauce you like) 8 cactus spines 1/4 c butter other spices that you like Step One: Squeeze the sea urchins until they're dry. Step Two: Wash the melted ice rocks from Pluto, and slice the sea urchins and cactus spines. Step Three: Mix the flour and butter until you get a thick paste. Step Four: Add green tea until the thick paste becomes much more watery. Step Five: Take the cut sea urchins and cactus spines and crush them to tiny bits and put them with the mixture. Step Six: Stir. Add sauce and spices. Step Seven: Add Mars rocks and ENJOY

--Alisha

Recipe for Chicken Sauté with Peanut Sauce Which Gives You Special Powers

Regular Ingredients: Chicken from 3 chickens in California Peanuts from a farm in Cape Town, South Africa Milk from a cow in Calcutta, India Sugar from a plant in Hawaii Magical Ingredients: A frog's wart A piece of coral from the Great Barrier Reef Water from the Caspian Sea Exactly 1 lb of sand Note: Recipe must be made at exactly 6:30 PM every year on June 21.

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1. Get a really huge cauldron 2. Dump all the ingredients in the cauldron 3. Let it sit there. 4. At around 6, June 21, put the mixture in the freezer 5. At around 6:10 boil the mixture until 6:30 6. It will be finally ready to eat for magical powers at 6:30'

--Atri

From: Secret Codes (Students created secret codes with partners and then wrote stories inspired by the codes.)

His mother saw the message. She jumped and she asked Percy, "Where did you find this?"

He said, "At the park."

She ran to the park and Percy followed. his mom dug a hole really deep, then picked up something. She told Percy to open it. He did, then a gleaming light came out and Percy saw a bunch of treasure and gold. His mother said, "This is a treasure people fought a war for, now it is yours...forever."

--Shivam

From: Secrets on the Line (Each student selects a secret that is written on a piece of paper hung on a clothesline. That secret becomes the centerpiece of his/her story.)

Adam then shows me his rather ugly so-called "time machine."

"It's just a cardboard box!" I said impatiently.

"Yeah, but it's magical, and I got it from rentatimemachine.com. They even delivered it to me in two days!" said Adam, quite proud of himself for finding that website.

"So, you didn't build it yourself?" I asked, puzzled.

"Of course I didn't. I just told you that I got it from rentatimemachine.com," said Adam, laughing his head off.

"Oh yeah," I said, blushing.

"Where should we go?" asked Adam.

--Chaitanya

 

My secret started when I saw a sparkling, dusty blob in the sky, not much bigger than my fingernail. It flew around and seemed to say, "Com on! Let's go!" I just rubbed my eyes to see if it was true that I had seen a real life fairy. But, when I looked back again, it was gone, so I just went back into the house. When I got inside, I ran to my room and I started drawing fairies.

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One day, I decided to go off for an adventure to find out what was causing my troubles...Suddenly, a mysterious force pulled me upwards. I climbed into a parachute that was made of grass and leaves. I climbed inside and it floated to a shiny wonderland.

--Shreya

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Treasures from the Students at Marshall Road

This session of "Take My Word For It!" at Marshall Road was all about treasures. What makes a treasure a treasure? Where and how do we find treasures? Can a person be a treasure? From long lost twins to treasures found in the backs of taxi cabs, the treasures imagined by the writers at Marshall Road were inventive, exciting, and written with great care.  

Screaming Donut

Hi, I’m Fabi. I’m ten years old. Guess what happened to me. I lost a sceaming donut in a taxi! I mean, even I know that screaming donuts are so creepy, but I really liked that guy… or girl donut so I didn’t care. It was the screaming donut’s birthday! I guess I could tell you the story…

It was my screaming donut’s birthday, so I was going to take her on her first taxi ride. Cool, right! Well, not cool. I was hungry and I decided to go get some coffee and I left her in the cab! Poor screaming donut. I looked for her for 15 minutes. So long!

Then a week later, I was really hungry and going to get some coffee when I saw the taxi driver on the street yelling like some crazy guy. He was telling the world that he saw a screaming donut. That was it! Breathlessly, I asked him if he knew where she was. He said she ran away.

I was getting really hungry so I was going to have some pizza of sorrow. Then, I saw her-my screaming donut on the street! We ran toward each other in slow motion. I hugged her and hugged her so much that… I ate her. Ooops, my bad!

-FABI

(From: I left a treasure in a taxi cab!)

The Thief’s Cane

Once there was a thief who lost his cane, which he used to help him when he was on a trip to steal stuff. He mostly used it to make his trips more successful. He could grab things with it and store things in his cane which was much bigger than it looked. But one day, he lost his cane and after that his thieving trips weren’t so successful.

A few weeks later, he was outside walking to the store and he saw a paper hung up on a tree. He got curious, so he read the paper and saw that someone had lost an incredible thing. He really really wanted that thing. It was a treasure. So that night, the thief went to the museum where all the lost items are to see where that lost item was. He tip-toed right in and began his search.

UP AND DOWN, LEFT AND RIGHT, it seemed like it wasn’t there. Finally, he recognized something familiar. He was happy he found it and proud of himself. It was his lost cane!

But then he heard someone coming so he hid.

He was very frightened of being caught. It was a police officer, who had heard him make noise. The office didn’t see anyone so he went away. The thief was so happy that he forgot to get the first item that he liked. From his fright, he never stole again.

-ZAINAB

(From: The Museum of Found Objects)

Funion Cun and His Diamond

“Have a fit body, run run run,”

Said good old Funion Cun.

Funion Cun was a very rich man,

For he had a diamond, one special diamond,

Shaped like a can.

He thought with it, laughed with it, played with it, fought with it, but there is one thing Funion Cun never dared to do.

And that was give his diamond to the man with only one shoe

Or give it to the lady who’s making a zoo,

Never to the man who paints big doors.

Said Funion Cun, “I loved my diamond ever so much,

I prepared to give her a ring.

But when I asked her to marry me,

She said nothing.”

-- REAGAN

(From: The Story of a Valuable Object)

Missing Shoes in NYC

I was running to catch a cab in New York. That busy place (ugh). It’s always sooo hard to catch a cab, but I did it! When I stepped into the cab, I gave the cabbie my name, Veronica Joni. I’m a famous actress from the one and only smash hit Lucky Gold.

As the cabbie drove away, I applied my cherry red lipstick and my so thick mascara. A girl does her makeup, people, duh! Suddenly, the cab came to a complete halt. It was at my destination, downtown New York. That’s where all the starz go. As I left, I made sure I had everything: purse, nail polish… but not my extra pair of expensive shoes. My shoes! Oh my goodness. How could I forget those shoes? They cost $500, and that was the price on sale! Besides, Veronica Joni, does not forget stuff (actually, I do, but that’s not the point!).

Before I thought it through, I grabbed my cell and called 911! It takes forever for the police to pick up the phone, even when someone calls 911. Finally they picked up.

“Hello, how may I help you?” the man’s voice came through the other line.

“Yes hi, I need to report that my designer shoes have gone missing,” I said.

“Uh… I’m sorry, ma’am. We can’t help you,” the policeman said, giving me the bad news.

“But I’m Veronica Joni, you have to respect--hello?” Darn those police officers, hanging up during the worst emergency ever! And to think they say they’re the best in New York.

Get yourself together, Veronica, I told myself over and over. I’ll get those shoes. But three days later all I could think was, I won’t get those shoes. The cabbie hadn’t called me back in three dumb days, agh! I did give him my number. People can take precautions, right? Thank goodness the the taxi programs have daily route maps. I went to the nearest taxi booth and grabbed a map. I looked at the map and noticed that the next stop was downtown New York, where I was! The cab would be here any minute.

Two hours later, the cab was there. I tried to look my best, but my hair was frizzy because I was very impatient.

“Sir, remember me, Veronica Jon--”

“No.” the cabbie rudely interrupted.

“”Okay, um, I think I left my designer shoes in your cab.” I waited for a response.

“Oh, you mean these beauties?” The cabbie handed me back my shoes… but not all in one piece.

“Ahhh!” I cried, wiping tears off my face. “What happened to my shoes?” I whined.

“Funny story, they fell into the mud and then got ripped and chewed on,” the cabbie explained.

“Who chewed on them? And by the way, that story was not funny!”

“Me,” the cabbie admitted. “Sorry, I’m weird like that. Eating shoes is my thing. My mom made me stop eating glue sticks, and what else was I supposed to eat, French fries?”

It’s okay, Veronica. It’s okay, I told myself. I took a deep breath and told the cabbie that I didn’t need those shoes back. What I didn’t tell him was that he was about to get sued!

-- KENNEDY

(From: I Left a Treasure in a Taxi Cab!)

Found Poem

Fun

Music

like smoothies…

Smoothies where you rock out.

Energized, Happy, Purple, Orange

Pink-cloud-tropical-cool-springy smoothies.

-- CAMILLA

(From: Found Poetry)

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