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Read It Here First! Mining for Stories at Chabot Elementary


Inspired by the popular world of Minecraft, our 3rd-5th grade writers at Chabot Elementary in Oakland "mined" for stories earlier this year!


Students worked from prompts to create their own story in a world of their choice, choosing 1 of 3 dimensions
Hanisuhs
Hanisuhs was an ice dragon. She was born in a place called Orsavya. Suddenly a drought came and all the water and snow evaporated. She decided to find a new home, so she got into a boat at midnight and set sail. The next day was hard. There was a leak in the boat and it kept overflowing with water. When evening came a crash of lightening struck, barely missing the boat. When she looked up she saw a dark figure hovering in the clouds. It was a lightning dragon! Lightning dragons are the enemies of ice, water and snow dragons. A snarl pushed its way onto the lightning dragon's face as he swooped down onto the boat. When he was face to face with Hanisuhs, he hissed, "Goodbye!" Lightning flashed toward her but she dodged it. The lightening hit the boat and smoke bulged into the air, leaving a massive hole. More water flooded into the boat. After a few moments the water was up to her haunches...
-Alma


Students explored "point of view" in worlds of their own creation using descriptive writing
The Point of View
Once there was a robber sneaking quietly around the city. He came to a bank and climbed onto the roof where he found a trap door. He jumped through the trap door and when he landed inside the bank, he saw stacks of money. "Bonus!" he thought to himself. He looked up and saw a sign that read "All this money is 7.6.97 billion dollars!" It took him five minutes to gather all the money into his bags. He bought famous cars and was never caught.
-Emerson


Here are two stories-in-progress from an exercise on building a story arc through narrative writing
Minecraft Adventure
One day I was walking and saw a village. Every inch of the village was dark blue and was surrounded by crops that were as black as a chalkboard. There were about 50 houses full of MPC's. I was really hungry so I stole some food from the black crops. The food tasted like hamburgers. As I went on exploring, I found a lime green enderman. All I had on me for a weapon was a wooden sword. I hit the enderman with the sword. It flashed purple and then disappeared. Behind where the enderman was standing was a strange red and purple portal. I jumped through it... 
-Lucas

The Bandit
One day a helicopter crashed into an unknown place. It was all forest and far ahead there was a village full of people, The bandit (who was flying the helicopter) decided he wanted to spend his life there. Sadly though, he was kicked out. Nobody trusted him because he set loose 3,000,000,000 zombie pigmen. He lived in a shack about 7,000 feet away from the village and snuck back every night to steal supplies.  
-Jonathan


Students built characters using narrative writing techniques
The Story of Zooy Dooy
Madness. Fear. Destruction. Zooy ran from the forsaken battle (Elkite vs. Sanartrol). Senartro was losing hopelessly and her planet was slowly dying. Zooy ran as fast as she could until she ran completely off of her planet and ended up in deep space. Behind her, the planet (with her entire family on it) exploded into bits. Zooy is now the last Murflow-- tiny little Zooy Dooy with her ragged purple fur...
-Rocco

Felix
Felix is 17. He is son the of Posiden. He can heal a cut just by touching it to water. His last name is Wood. He decided he wanted to go to training camp, so he took ten days to build a chariot. His best friend is named Jack. He has a scar across his left eye from a mountain lion. He really likes crystals and rocks. His favorite food is pork, and he loves to play hockey. 
-Charley


Students were given a prompt ("a monster is coming at your character") & wrote stories from a 1st person perspective
The Forest on Mars
I am in an unknown forest on Mars. My name is George. I can see rust colored rocks. There's a huge, legless alien coming right for me! I jump into a nearby lake to escape, and KABOOM! it explodes because its full of bombs and grenades! Now I am left hiding in a big hole in the ground... 
-Serhan

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WRITE OUT LOUD! at Chabot Elementary

Chabot 11-5-14 at 2.57 PMWe started a new program for 3rd-5th graders at Chabot Elementary this fall: WRITE OUT LOUD!, a songwriting class led by two veteran teachers, Annah Wilson & Joseph Shumake. The students worked both independently and collaboratively to write lyrics, work out rhythms, create bridges and make music. We think the videos speak for themselves (check them out: a looping exercise & testing out lyrics).

Student excerpts from lyric writing exercises: Stick to Me

Do you see that the sky is calling… Do you see, do you see, that the sky is calling…

Too Much Too Late Too Much You big fool

If you don’t… the sun will burn and the rain will start If you don’t… the sun will burn and the rain will start

Too much Too late Too much Hurry Up

I’m in a far away town Waiting for you

(Too Late) (Too Late)

-Andrea

Up and Down

The sun comes up, the sun goes down The moon comes up, big, full and round

Big and round Up and down In the night Things spin me around

The planets spin ‘round and ‘round Nothings there, just darkness in the air

Big and round Up and down In the night Things spin me around

-Ashley

Blue Day

I had a sad, blue day So I decided to push it away

You make me stay When I want to go You make me go When I wish I could stay

I’m far away from yesterday I feel like I want to wreck this day

You make me stay When I want to go You make me go When I wish I could stay

You are mine and I am yours Don’t put me away, don’t close the door

Make me stay But I want to go Make me go When I wish I could stay

-Ilyasia

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The Secret Writers at Chabot Elementary

Chabot Elementary's 4th-5th graders spent this spring working on "Secrets". They created secret identities, recipes, mysteries...the rest we can't tell ;)! Read some of their creations below:

"As I look in the mirror I see someone different than the real girl. All of the talents I posses have changed. I do not see the brave girl who can keep a straight face while her teacher yells at her. In her place, I see a dirty, sassy girl who stares back with an "Is that so?!" expression on her face. Instead of the girl who can break up and sort out fights between kids even five years older than her, I see a Talk-Back-So-What-Girl sighing and rolling her eyes..." -Anthony James Cardanal (student's pen name)

"One day when I was walking home from school I saw a rabbit leap out of the bushes. It suddenly stopped when it saw me. The rabbit jumped to me so I could pet him. I picked him up and brought him home. I found a box and put him in it. Every night he makes a lot of noise so I have to give him carrots every night. His favorite foods are carrots and lettuce. His name is Fred. I hope my parent's don't find out!" -Ceci

"My secret is made from...sugar, soda, apple, yogurt, salt, pepper, egg and water. My secret was found in a trash can. My secret can make you walk through walls..." -Andrea

"Marigold stood outside in the pouring rain and shuddered. Her white shirt was getting stained...and it was picture day! Could it get any worse? Yes. Marigold held up her lunchbox, which was filled to the brim with water! Today was horrible. Marigold seethed..." (excerpt from a story in progress) -Sarinah Our Chabot Secret Writers

 

Chabot Spring 2014

 

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Check Out These Creative Writing Samples from Our Chabot Class!

Students in our after-school and community classes are exploring all the different ways writers generate ideas, and put captivating words on the page.

Here are some writing excerpts from our young authors (and some of their parents!) at Chabot Elementary's Spring reading:

 

By Helen

Prompt: This I Believe...

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By Tess

Prompt: You are home by yourself. The postman comes to the door to deliver a package. It's a large box wrapped in brown paper and says in big black letters, Caution: Content Dangerous.

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By Grace

Prompt: You are home by yourself. The postman comes to the door to deliver a package. It's a large box wrapped in brown paper and says in big black letters, Caution: Content Dangerous.

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Then, both the kids AND their parents were asked to form a story starting with "Just then..." and using the characters George, Charlie, Greg, Obama, and Dr. Bob Shishkabob.

See what they came up with!

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Just then...5

Just then...6

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Come Hear Our Young Writers Read Their Original Work!

IMG_1270 In the next couple of weeks our talented writers will be showcasing some of the awesome writing they've been working on all Spring!

Look out for them at:

Musically Minded Academy (5776 Broadway, Oakland, CA 94618)

  • Chabot Elementary: Tuesday, May 31st @ 5:30pm
  • Crocker Highlands Elementary: Wednesday, June 1st @5:30pm
  • Thornhill Elementary (2nd & 3rd-5th): Monday, June 6th @5:30pm
  • Redwood Heights Elementary: Tuesday, June 7th @5:30pm
  • The Young Writer's Lab: Thursday, June 9th @5:30pm

San Ramon (tentatively at Rakestraw Books)

  • Walt Disney Elementary (2nd/3rd & 4th/5th): Tuesday, June 5th @ 5:30pm

Palo Alto

  • El Carmelo Elementary: Thursday, May 26th @ 5:30pm

San Francisco

  • Katherine Delmar Burke School: May 23rd @ 5:00pm
  • Flynn Elementary: May 25th @ 5:30pm

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